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Green Portfolio
Preface My writing is My joys and fears, My writing has
When I started looking through my accumulated work
for this portfolio, I started thinking about how my writing has changed. In high school, I could get away with almost anything. The teachers always talked, and when my name
was mentioned, it was always complimentary.
If I slacked off a bit, it was okay, because the teachers knew
I understood the point of the lesson.
If the class had to revise their papers, the teacher said, "Have
somebody like K. read it over." I was held up as the standard of
writing that no one else could quite achieve.
The result of this is that I tested my limits, tried to get away
with as much as I could. I don't
remember ever rereading a paper I had written, let alone revising one.
My first draft was the best.
After all, I got a good enough grade on it, so why should I try
any harder? Then I got to college, and everything
changed. I couldn't get away
with just knocking off a few paragraphs and still get the grades I wanted. My professors make me look over my work, find
the really good stuff, and fix the rest.
I have to search through my own writing to discover what those
high school teachers already knew: I am a good writer. I have good ideas, and the ability to make those ideas come alive
for others. I have learned that
revision is not punishment, but rather a gift.
If I made this wonderful first draft of a paper, just imagine
what I can do with a revision. I
get to buff it, polish it, make it shine in the darkness as well as
the light. I am allowed to take a good thing and make it
even better. I get to do this. I don't have to settle for a second rate paper
that relies on teachers' pre-conceived notions of my abilities; I can
prove my abilities to anyone, even those who don't know me, by improving
my words, my phrases, my ideas and creating a truly first rate paper. In just three brief months, I have
become a better writer. I have
a hard time believing how much better my writing is now that I know
I will always have another crack at it.
At any time, I can just put down what I really think, and not
be afraid of that being wrong, because I can always change it. The oddities of my papers can be forgiven, and I can usually find
a great idea hiding somewhere in those blatantly honest thoughts. I think nothing of it, The works I have included in this
portfolio need a bit of an explanation. "The Audience" was an assignment for
my First Year Seminar, and it describes what I found within the audience
during Dr. Norman Ramsey's presentation at Coe. "Reflection on the Lewis and Clark Documentary" was also
an assignment. Our class was
studying the journals of Lewis and Clark, as edited by Bernard DeVoto,
and in addition to the journals themselves, we read Dayton Duncan's
Out West, in which Duncan followed the Lewis and Clark Trail
from St. Louis to the Pacific Ocean in the early 1980's.
We finished this unit by watching the Ken Burns documentary about
Lewis and Clark, which was also written by Duncan.
Our assignment for this paper was to discuss the film's advantages
and disadvantages, as well as to compare and contrast all three works. I selected these two papers because I feel that
they truly represent the way I write: I attempt to put my thoughts down
in a somewhat logical way, and every once in a while, I look up from
the screen to find a really great sentence or paragraph that makes me
feel really proud, and truly blessed to have the ability to do this,
to write. I took a walk and The final essay in this portfolio
is an essay I wrote in response to a walk I had taken off campus.
When I wrote the first draft of it, I basically just tried to get
down as many facts as I could in a short amount of time.
I just wanted the assignment done.
Then, I learned something: this
paper would be a major project for the entire term, and I would be expected
to revise it several times. I was
almost insulted at first, here was an essay of mine, already finished
in my eyes, that I would have to change?
More than once? Surely it would only take one revision to make
this paper absolutely perfect. The draft included in this portfolio
is the fifth version of this essay. I talked to a person in the Writing Center, my instructor, the person
who took the walk with me, my instructor again, my roommate, a girl who
lives down the hall, my instructor again.
I have learned my lesson: writing, you can do alone. Good writing, that takes a team of honest, caring
individuals who are sensitive to the writer, but not so sensitive as to
not be helpful. My writing is better
because of these people. They showed
me how to integrate conversation with thoughts, new ideas with old observations,
good stuff in the first draft with good ideas I had left out. This paper went from an assignment
to a project to an annoyance to one of the most important things I have
done here. It almost hurt to turn
it in the last time, to say good-bye to this part of me. At the same time, however, it felt good to look
back at all the other "final drafts" and recognize the improvements
I had made over time. This part
of me is the best it can be; that is, until I make a new discovery, and
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